How about this?

送交者: fuzzify 于 2007-01-22, 17:46:59:

回答: 试译崔健的《最后一枪》由 eddie 于 2007-01-22, 15:03:20:

A stray bullet hit my chest
Suddenly, the memory swelled in my heart
Out of my eyes, they flew into tears
But no sorrow was felt

有点文学再创作的嫌疑 :) (无内容) - eddie (0 bytes) 2007-01-22, 19:48:45 (122163)
- Somewhat true. Yet, on the other hand, peopl would definitely say - fuzzify (198 bytes) 2007-01-22, 21:24:44 (122198)
sorry, "they" should be "it", i.e. the memory. (无内容) - fuzzify (0 bytes) 2007-01-22, 17:47:55 (122137)
- stray->strayed, heart->head (无内容) - 匆匆过客 (0 bytes) 2007-01-22, 17:56:00 (122140)
  - stray and strayed are both ok. heart is better than head. (无内容) - fuzzify (0 bytes) 2007-01-22, 21:21:06 (122196)